This was excellent, E.B. Seems like a version of hell—doomed to repeat his mistakes on an infinite loop. Well, not repeat, technically—more like endless variations on the same theme. It all made for a great read.
What a Groundhog Day loop to be stuck in at the end. Great characters, great tension, frustrating outcomes. Perfection. Yellow-haired Mary, oh Mary. Thanks for contributing to TMV.
Lather. Rinse. Repeat. But he can never come clean . . .
Exactly...thanks for commenting!
This was excellent, E.B. Seems like a version of hell—doomed to repeat his mistakes on an infinite loop. Well, not repeat, technically—more like endless variations on the same theme. It all made for a great read.
Thank you! That’s exactly what I intended, I’m glad it worked.
I love stories like this. You managed to pull it off in such a short run, too.
Thank you! I’ve found I like the challenge sometimes of a shorter story.
A recursive loop. Nice!
Indeed! Thanks.
fantastic
thank you, EJ!
What a Groundhog Day loop to be stuck in at the end. Great characters, great tension, frustrating outcomes. Perfection. Yellow-haired Mary, oh Mary. Thanks for contributing to TMV.
Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it.
"Not today, ‘pal’..."
The way you wrote this it seems like he's saying "pal" with air quotes. I assume you intended that?
Hm. I intended more of a pointedly sarcastic tone, without the gestures.