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May 5Liked by E.B. Howard

This is great. I love the will-they / won’t they, and you set the scene brilliantly. Just enough detail so I feel a part of a vibrant scene, and at no point over burdened or sluggish. Chefs kiss!

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Thank you for your kind comment! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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May 3Liked by E.B. Howard

I didn't know what direction you were going to take this. Beautifully done! Officially received! Let us know when you sell the movie rights.

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Oh, wow. I admire your mastery in creating the character of Rob. He feels so real, yet too irresistible to be real.

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Thank you very much! I didn't know if I could get him over the border from pushy to roguish. I'm really very happy with how he turned out.

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Excellent!🩶

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Thank you for reading! I'm glad you liked it.

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Hey, if you want I can easilly add it to the Thorny Thursday. I really liked it, excellet dialogues.🩶

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Oh yes, I'm planning to show it off tomorrow for sure!! It took me long enough to contribute a real romance piece...>_>;

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I had not expected this to be romance at all, at least it did not give me goosebumps. This is quite a chill cool atmosphere and with enigmatic characters too. Definitely not a rom-com but more like rom-noir. I like your references to places as therapists lol. I can't help but remember some pulp magazine covers with this story 😅. Great job dressing romance in a cool fashion. I love the photo concept. That is quite a charmer!

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Thank you very much! It all came together very unexpectedly- when I started it I didn't know that the photo would be important at all.

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Awwww! I love happy endings!! I’m picky and cynical with romantic stories, but I absolutely love this! The dialogue rang true and wasn’t overblown at all, and Rob and Tanya’s chemistry was delightful. Best of luck with the final round!

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Aw, thank you! Chemistry between people is the only thing that can rescue some decisions that are really questionable otherwise, and I was unsure the whole time if I could squeeze enough development into 1500 words to turn a guy whom I initially thought was a jerk into a justifiable love interest. I'm delighted that it worked out!

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"We'll always have Paris..."

One specific detail you changed from the 250-word version that helped: describing it as "the heavy scent of oak and patchouli". I'm just an ox; I thought they were other people in the first version.

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Ooh, that's helpful to know. Thanks for the feedback.

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Pairs doesn't care, but she sure does. Well done, EB!

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Thank you!

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Best of luck EB!

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If there's anywhere to rescue a relationship, it's Paris.

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Maybe! I've been a couple of times and felt the romantic reputation was a bit overblown. But then I was broke and on study abroad.

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